I staked my happiness
on mozzarella sticks.
Breaded, gooey beauty,
melting on my tongue
like a cheesy waterfall.
on mozzarella sticks.
Breaded, gooey beauty,
melting on my tongue
like a cheesy waterfall.
Eagerly, I made my way
down the cafeteria stairs,
oblivious to the chattering crowd.
My eyes stuck to the corner,
where the warmer glinted
like a mecca of savory flavor,
a treasure trove of steaming delicacies.
But as I approached
the see-through warmer doors,
egads! No mozzarella sticks
looked back at me.
The smile melted off my face
and pooled onto the floor.
All that I could do
was mop it up and shove it
in my pocket
and move on,
sadly trudging
through my cheese-less day.
through my cheese-less day.
I could be wrong here, but I am guessing this is in part a parody of Elizabeth Bishop's poem, "A Miracle for Breakfast," which we looked at briefly in class. Either way, I found this simple poem amusing and effortless. It doesn't ask much of the reader, but it gives a good deal back through its humor and vivid imagery. I like the clever play on words when the smile melts (like cheese) on the face of the speaker in the poem. I liked the ending line, which is funny and resonates. My suggestion for improvement is simply that this could be longer, and I think it would hold up and make the poem more engaging and immersive. Bring on the cheese!
ReplyDeletethis poem is very fun! It has the economical quality that we've discussed in class. I especially love your description of your smile melting. It sort of has a hallucinogenic, other-wordly quality.
ReplyDeletevery entertaining and a pleasure to read! great job! I love "cheesy waterfall" and "Mecca of savory flavor"
ReplyDeleteThis is how I felt the day the YU caf stopped selling curly fries and never brought them back. (RIP)
ReplyDeleteI loved this poem! It felt very relatable the way that over the course of a day a thing that in the grand scheme of things is really quite small feels like the biggest deal. I also really loved that you used the word "egads." I am trying to decide whether or not that word is under used; perhaps it is and wouldn't it be fun if it came back, or maybe that would detract its fun.
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